Let's Write: Revise -> Consult about your ideas, structure, arguments, ...
Revision is the stage in the process where you review and make
changes in order to organize and clarify the message. Not only do
YOU reflect on your presentation of the message
but validate your success by consulting others for their feedback
and guidance.
Suggestions
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Checklist:
Ask others to read your work and tell you if:
the ideas follow one upon the other?
the ideas
are pertinent or necessary to the message?
you should rearrange to improve and clarify the message?
the ideas are presented in a logical sequence?
the ideas and imagery complete and complement the message?
I used
brainstorming or a story map to create and organize ideas.
I describe
where my story takes place.
I describe what
characters look like.
I describe what
characters feel.
My story has a
beginning, middle, and end.
My introduction
is exciting and inviting.
I have a
satisfying conclusion.
I have listened
to suggestions from the teacher or peer writers.
My ideas flow and
are well connected.
Questions you might ask when consulting:
from
The Writing Center,
University of North Carolina at Chapel Hill
The beginning/idea stage: Do I understand the
assignment? Am I gathering the right kinds of
information to answer this question? Are my
strategies for approaching this assignment effective
ones? How can I discover the best way to develop my
early ideas into a feasible draft?
Outline/thesis: I have an idea about what I
want to argue, but I'm not sure if it is an
appropriate or complete response to this assignment.
Is the way I'm planning to organize my ideas
working? Does it look like I'm covering all the
bases? Do I have a clear main point? Do I know what
I want to say to the reader?
Rough draft: Does my paper make sense, and is
it interesting? Have I proven my thesis statement?
Is the evidence I'm using convincing? Is it
explained clearly? Have I given the reader enough
information? Does the information seem to be in the
right order? What can I say in my introduction and
conclusion?
Early polished draft: Are the transitions
between my ideas smooth and effective? Do my
sentences make sense individually? How's my writing
style?
Late or final polished draft: Are there any
noticeable spelling or grammar errors? Are my
margins, footnotes, and formatting okay? Does the
paper seem effective? Is there anything I should
change at the last minute?
After the fact: How should I interpret the
comments on my paper? Why did I receive the grade I
did? What else might I have done to strengthen this
paper? What can I learn as a writer about this
writing experience? What should I do the next time I
have to write a paper?
Language:
Questions
Are the ideas presented in a logical
sequence?
Do you think the ideas follow each other?
Are the ideas pertinent or necessary to
the message?
How could I rearrange or add points to
improve and clarify the message?
Are the ideas and descriptions complete and
do they complement the message?
Is
the purpose of the text clear?
Which elements need more work: covering
the topic, the research,
attention to the type of audience, the language, or meeting the purpose?
Responses
Maybe you could improve this: part, sentence,
idea.
Why don’t you start with this and then add
that?
Maybe you could re-arrange these ideas
You could explain this part more.
Is this really necessary?
I don’t understand this …
What do you mean here?
Maybe you could add more: arguments, facts,
research.
The language is a bit: complicated, too simple,
confusing.
It looks: great, dramatic, unorganized.
I think it is well-explained, interesting and
easy to understand.
Twiddla-
real time collaboration on documents, websites, and images.
Includes writing and drawing tools
and audio to talk in real time. No registration needed.
Groupboard- Free online whiteboard and chat that can be
easily embedded into your website. Also is an iPhone, iPad and
Android app.
Titan Pad-
real time collaboration on document that assigns everyone their
own color. Includes formatting options like MS Word. No
registration needed.
Meeting
Words- nearly the exact same service as Titan Pad.
http://primarypad.com/ -
PrimaryPad is a web-based word processor designed for schools
that allows pupils and teachers to work together in real-time.
Writeboard-
real time collaboration that tracks changes from
each person, no registration needed.
Wiggio-
Developed by college students this free site has everything from
meeting planning, your own whiteboard, updates, group mailing, a
calendar, video conferencing room, group text messages, and much
more! I love this website. Read more about it in the
ILearnTechnology blog.
Enter
the Group- create project pages and online classrooms for
free. Includes features like to-do lists, tasks widget, chat,
message boards, group email, file sharing, an online calendar,
checklists, blogs, polls, and more!
Juntos- communicate in real time through audio, video, and
chat. Supports a multivideo chat and scheduling option.
iBrainstorm App for iPad and iPhone-Allows
up to 4 to collaborate on a brainstorming diagram or group
thinking process that can be emailed. Has drawing and
writing tools.
Scribblar-Real-time multi-user whiteboard, image upload/
download, text chat with userlist, live audio
Zoho-
Collaborate on PowerPoint presentations, spreadsheets, word
documents, and more. Similar to Google Apps, but shows a
condensed view of all recent project activity and includes group
chat rooms, forums, wikis, and a tabbed interface.
CrocDocs-
Collaboratively highlight and comment on PDFs, Word documents,
images, and more!
Prezi-the alternative to PowerPoint. Create non-linear
presentations with images, text, video, and cool transitions.
Now with the ability for students to collaborate on one Prezi
together in real-time.
Prezi as a Presentation Tool wiki- Lists several tips,
resources, and examples. You will also find useful
information in integrating Twitter and other tools with
Prezi.
The Writing Process:
